37th #SatSunTails Winners

& so we have our #SatSunTails winner!

You can help by promoting next week’s #SatSunTails on your blogs, twitter, G+, facebook, tumblr etc, that would be great. Also, if you’re on twitter and you’d like an @reply every weekend in order to remind you that the competition is open then please leave a note regarding this along with your twitter handle in the comments of this post so I can set that up for you.

But for now, let’s get to the winners!

The Written Prompt

insidious horizon

Runner Up Mentions

@LupusAnthropos –

A great piece with a slow but enrapturing story.

@jezri1 –

Just an awesome tale as usual injected with humour.  

@reravelling –

Some beautiful descriptions and prose.

Overall Winner

@klingorengi –

Pure brilliance with a fantastic final line and an intriguing first.

Deceitful Appearance

Mr. Fluffy was hardly the plush and cuddly stuffed animal he appeared, at first glance, to be. He was, quite possibly, the single strongest force for evil to ever exist in all of the myriad dimensions of the multiverse.

They was nothing quiescent, harmonious or benevolent about him whatsoever. He was possessed of a remarkably pure and unadulterated vileness defying any attempts at qualification or quantification.

He had exceeded the “super villain quotient” eons ago. He had transcended the “thoroughly merciless index” when only a stripling. He had sailed beyond the “insidious horizon” on a voyage of destruction and desolation with no remorse at all.

And yet, through it all, he was just so darned cute it was hard to resist the urge to snuggle him. It was that innate cuteness and irresistibility that led one civilization after another to their indisputably untimely end. Yes, Mr. Fluffy was, quite simply, one very, very bad bunny.

Critique Mentions

Now, as promised, I shall critique those entries that didn’t make it. Sometimes it can literally come down to the smallest things.

Whittling the results down to find critiques this week was incredibly hard and hopefully you can see why with the excellent entries that were received.

@me2annoyed –

Again, it’s the small things such as this ‘“Yeah,” Replied’. Replied isn’t at the start of the sentence nor is it the name of a character so you really don’t need it after the comma and closing speech marks.

@jblearnstowrite –

Unfortunately the ending line didn’t live up to all of the build up that you had going throughout the story causing a bit of anti-climax. And the tense switch at the very beginning was an awkward change.

@Lurchmunster –

I just felt that there wasn’t enough story to it. It was as if it was a couple of paragraphs taken from a larger piece where we’re given background information and thoughts but no actual action to keep the reader engaged.

So thank you to all of those who entered.  The criticism is never meant to harm. It is there to help you better your writing and someday win overall. I’m sure it will also benefit those who were not criticised. I hope this has helped you in your writing as well as encouraged you to join in again next week!

Click here to read the mentioned entries.

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