32nd #SatSunTails Winners!

& so we have our #SatSunTails winner!

You can help by promoting next week’s #SatSunTails on your blogs, twitter, G+, facebook, tumblr etc, that would be great. Also, if you’re on twitter and you’d like an @reply every weekend in order to remind you that the competition is open then please leave a note regarding this along with your twitter handle in the comments of this post so I can set that up for you.

But for now, let’s get to the winners!

The Written Prompt

undetected innocence

Runner Up Mentions

@kelseypotter13 –

Beautifully sad and poignant with such a perfect finishing line.

@reravelling –

Simple but striking. The characters’ isolation could be felt through the words. 

@Kimmydonn –

A fantastic use of the prompt. I really loved the imagery at the beginning too, allowing the reader to work out for themselves exactly what it is she’s caked in.

Overall Winner

@sixwordsmag –

A brilliant first entry to the competition. I thoroughly enjoyed the world you built up in so few words with such penetrating descriptions.

Winning Entry

She made it out into the alley. It was raining heavily and in minutes she was soaked to the skin. She knew she’d have to find cover soon, the chemical weapons from the last few years bringing a new meaning to the term acid rain. Already her skin was prickling with a million tiny burns, leaving microscopic scars on the first layer of dermis. Although these scars wouldn’t heal, provided she got out of the storm soon, they could at least be sloughed off with the other dead skin cells. Unlike her new scars.

He’d said he wanted to test her innocence. Couldn’t believe she’d stayed undetected for so long. His radar was finely tuned to those burdened by innocent ways. Or so he said. Perhaps she’d be safe now, if she ran fast enough, to escape recapture. After all, she was not innocent anymore.

Critique Mentions

Now, as promised, I shall critique those entries that didn’t make it. Sometimes it can literally come down to the smallest things.

@lurchmunster –

There was a tense change from the first sentence to the rest of the passage. Other than that a brilliant tale, but I would recommend a read through next time to catch these little errors.

@Leo_godin –

There as no capital letter at the start of one sentence, which is petty, but the quality of the entries sometimes requires me to judge on such insignificant things.

@jackkholt –

A great entry but a little confusing in regards to the workers inside metal boxes and what exactly the work is that the protagonist is going to complete. Other than that a great story that I enjoyed.

So thank you to all of those who entered.  The criticism is never meant to harm. It is there to help you better your writing and someday win overall. I’m sure it will also benefit those who were not criticised. I hope this has helped you in your writing as well as encouraged you to join in again next week!

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