26th #SatSunTails Winners

& so we have our #SatSunTails winner!

You can help by promoting next week’s #SatSunTails on your blogs, twitter, G+, facebook, tumblr etc, that would be great. Also, if you’re on twitter and you’d like an @reply every weekend in order to remind you that the competition is open then please leave a note regarding this along with your twitter handle in the comments of this post so I can set that up for you.

But for now, let’s get to the winners!

The Written Prompt

embers ablaze

And yet again, a hard choice between such talented entries!

Runner Up Mentions

@jezri1 –

Lovely and the name Endora reminded me of Bewitched! 

@leo_godin –

The first constructive use of 5o Shades that I’ve seen! I enjoyed this self exploration narrative immensely.

@klingorengi –

A fantastic continuation of your earlier Unmaker piece for this competition. I adored it!

Overall Winner

@Lurchmunster –

There was something peculiar and different about this that drew me to it straight away.

Winning Entry

Marie and Claire had a fight a few weeks ago. About me, of all things. Claire stormed out of their apartment that night. They’d lived together for eight years and they’d stopped talking with each other because of me.

I had to fix that.

I knew all I had to do was get them to talk to each other. Touch each other. Trust each other. I knew that would set the embers of their passion for each other ablaze . So, I put together a plan. I “kidnapped” them. Then stripped them and tied together in several hundred yards of rope. I dumped them on a chaise lounge in their own apartment. Hung a few decorations, so they wouldn’t know where they were. Then I left.

I considered staying and watching, lecher that I am. But, I decided they deserved privacy. I knew they’d work things out.

Critique Mentions

Now, as promised, I shall critique those entries that didn’t make it. Sometimes it can literally come down to the smallest things.

@horror_nerd –

My criticism of this piece is that there were no spaces after commas in sentences. This may just be an error but it makes the passage difficult to read. Apart from that, the dialogue tags in the centre of dialogue were not used the way they’re supposed to be. If the dialogue is part of the same spoken sentence then it’s fine to continue it after a tag. This page should help with any dialogue punctuation woes that you have and subsequently improve your writing.

So thank you to all of those who entered.  The criticism is never meant to harm. It is there to help you better your writing and someday win overall. I’m sure it will also benefit those who were not criticised. I hope this has helped you as well as encouraged you to join in again next week!

Click here to read the mentioned entries.

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