& so we have our #SatSunTails winner!
You can help by promoting next week’s #SatSunTails on your blogs, twitter, G+, facebook, tumblr etc, that would be great. Also, if you’re on twitter and you’d like an @reply every weekend in order to remind you that the competition is open then please leave a note regarding this along with your twitter handle in the comments of this post so I can set that up for you.
But for now, let’s get to the winners!
Runner Up Mentions
David’s story seemed like the beginning to something more, leaving the reader excited and questioning.
An excellent mistress of voracious vocabulary, Lisa’s paranoid contribution made for addictive reading.
A brilliant tale that conveys exactly how much Andrew has improved with his microfiction over the past few weeks of the competition.
I thought this story was powerfully told with some brilliantly evoked images.
Brigitte stood behind her sister, raising her finger to her lips to silence her boyfriend as she readied the knife. Her husband was in bed – his blood already pooling there and running down to the floor.
She had known about her husband and her sister since before the wedding but had naively believed that all of that would stop after she and Hank were married. She was wrong, of course, so she had rationalised an affair of her own.
After a while, one justification led to another and she formulated a new plan around her knowledge of the timing of her husband’s trysts. She knew when to catch them together and how to make sure she would be able to take care of both of them
Now, as even the image in the mirror seemed aware of her plans, she would deny Andrea the pleasure of reflection – and vice versa.
Now, as promised, I shall critique those entries that didn’t make it.
Lilianna Vetter –
It’s always great to see new entrants in the competition. I felt with this piece that there was a little too much information being crammed in, which caused confusion with what was going on in the story. Try to remember that you don’t have to be exact with all the details – give enough descriptive information for the reader to imagine most of the scene and then allow them to create the rest of it themselves. Shorter sentences also help to keep confusion to a minimum but make sure they fit with the flow you’re trying to create.
I enjoyed this tale; however, I also found it mildly confusing in regards to who the narrator was. It seems like you started the story as one of the triplets and then shifted to third person before shifting again part way through, leaving me unsure whether it’s one of the triplets speaking or somebody outside the siblings group.
@missshapenskies (Hannah) –
There was only the smallest problem with this piece. I loved it up until the last line where the tense slipped only slightly. If it wasn’t for that, you would have been a contender for the honourable mentions.
So thank you to all of those who entered. The criticism is never meant to harm. It is there to help you better your writing and someday win overall. I’m sure it will also benefit those who were not criticised. I hope this has helped you as well as encouraged you to join in again next week!
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