Winners of the 56th #SatSunTails #Microfiction #Competition!

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The more people that hear about #SatSunTails, the more entries there are and the better the competition becomes!

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But for now, let’s get to the winners!

The Written Prompt

delectable dimension/s

Runner Up Mentions

@needanidplease

Not what I was expecting but definitely a pleasant surprise.

@klingorengi

Brilliantly written, as usual.

Overall Winner

@Leo_Godin

Mildly disturbing but a delicious read.

Winning Entry

… and today, we will learn how to get the most juicy and delicious meat with just a few ingredients. Most home chefs believe the trick to delicious crispy skin is in the seasoning and oil, but that’s not the case. As with all cooking, the most important work is accomplished before any food reaches your kitchen.

The secret to this dish is how you raise your human before eating it. You may consider saving money by feeding corn and roughage, but the truly persnickety chef knows better. For best flavor, keep your human on a high-fat diet with additional coconut oil….

Feeding and caring for him, had been expensive, but as I peel juicy layers of skin and fat from his cheeks, I can’t help but marvel at the savory taste. So crispy! Each bite a delectable dimension with unique flavor and texture.
I just love those cooking shows.

Critique Mentions

Now, as promised, I shall critique those entries that didn’t make it. Sometimes it can literally come down to the smallest things.

@indigo_sam

A great piece, but there were far too many commas that should have been full stops.

Bloomy from @UndeadNether

Unfortunately, there were quite a few things I picked up on in this tale, such as "younger brother" which became repetitive after the first ‘brother’ in the same sentence. Should have used a different word such as ‘sibling’ to combat the repetition. However, the phrase was unnecessary as we’d already been informed that he was her younger brother in the dialogue. You could have used the extra words to add more story or description elsewhere. The use of ‘suddenly’ also detracted from the reader’s surprise. See here for help: http://litreactor.com/columns/8-words-to-seek-and-destroy-in-your-writing. As a final point ‘who was responsible for both Lola’s murder and Dwayne’s suicide’ tells us far too much. It’s far better if you can convey this through bits of dialogue or the character’s reactions. We don’t need to know everything straight away or there’s no suspense and that unfortunately causes readers to stop reading.

Thank you to all of those who entered.

The criticism is never meant to harm. It is there to help you better your writing and someday win overall. I’m sure it will also benefit those who were not criticised. I hope this has helped you in your writing as well as encouraged you to join in again next week!

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