Winners of the 55th #SatSunTails #Microfiction #Competition

You can help by promoting next week’s #SatSunTails on your blog or by giving the post a +1 or a tumblr reblog or click the ‘tweet this’ link up on the right hand side or share from the facebook fan page or retweet from my twitter page to spread the word.

Or, even better, go on the #SatSunTails twitter search results and retweet other entrants.

The more people that hear about #SatSunTails, the more entries there are and the better the competition becomes!

If you are on twitter and you’d like an @reply every weekend to remind you that the competition is open then please leave a note regarding this along with your twitter handle in the comments of this post so I can set that up for you.

But for now, let’s get to the winners!

The Written Prompt

scraping back skin

Runner Up Mentions

@needanidplease

Different with some great description.

@LurchMunster

Dark and dangerous. Not what I was expecting but certainly a good tale.

@doctormikereddy

Subtle and sweet.

Overall Winner

@indigo_sam

Winner of the week because I loved the descriptive architecture of the writing.

Winning Entry

The old house squats betwixt the pines, her dust covered windows concealing within like eyes milky with cataracts.

The furniture was covered in plastic as I started to scrape back her skin. A cream coloured layer with a brown interweaving pattern came first, it matched the furniture. Next a royal blue pattern against white. The bright astronaut decoration of a child’s room gave way to a foul mustard coloured floral pattern. Again and again I peeled back her coloured chameleon flesh and as I did I pulled back the veil from her past until I stripped her down to her archaic wooden bones. A large brown stain spotted the wall, that familiar iron pungency, almost sweet. The horror welled up within me and broke into screams as the sea breaks upon the shore and I knew then, I was looking upon her face.

The old house squats betwixt the pines.

Critique Mentions

Now, as promised, I shall critique those entries that didn’t make it. Sometimes it can literally come down to the smallest things.

@mrdlcastle

As good as the story was, there was just some stiffness to the dialogue that stopped it from flowing. It didn’t sound natural and, unfortunately, that kept me in the real world and not in the world you were creating.

Bloomy from @UndeadNether

There was a lot of telling in the story and not a lot of showing. You don’t need to tell a reader things. What you do need to do is hint and let them work it out for themselves, which, in turn, makes the story far more interesting and gripping.

Thank you to all of those who entered.

The criticism is never meant to harm. It is there to help you better your writing and someday win overall. I’m sure it will also benefit those who were not criticised. I hope this has helped you in your writing as well as encouraged you to join in again next week!

Click here to read the other mentioned entries.

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