35th #SatSunTails Winners

& so we have our #SatSunTails winner!

You can help by promoting next week’s #SatSunTails on your blogs, twitter, G+, facebook, tumblr etc, that would be great. Also, if you’re on twitter and you’d like an @reply every weekend in order to remind you that the competition is open then please leave a note regarding this along with your twitter handle in the comments of this post so I can set that up for you.

But for now, let’s get to the winners!

The Written Prompt

despicable cream

Runner Up Mentions

Bennett LaFond

Interesting and I’d love to know the rest of the backstory. A very thoughtful piece.

@jezri1

A terribly cute entry.  

@reravelling

I found the ending line a little quick, but still a funny tale.

Overall Winner

@fetterslopez

A terribly clever use of the prompts and an engaging and funny story that really tickled.

A Case Of Wood

Lightening struck the tree, and Vodka jumped, dropped his twenty-sided die, and swore. “Despicable Cream.”

“You’re such a baby,” Sassafras said absent-minded. She looked up to find Vodka’s hair smoking, his fingernails black, and the tree behind him char-black. Turning around she looked where their mother had been.

“He simply told the truth,” Vodka said. “Now mother’s a little miffed and…” he motioned to the tree. “Set one less plate for dinner.”

“Where is she now?” Sassafras asked.

Vodka motioned to a black cat slinking by the garden gate. He knelt to retrieve his die. “Dad should know better than to double cross a witch on all hallows eve.”

“Her own husband turned into a tree.” Sassafras sighed.

“I think it was the romp with the fairy that set her hackles.” Vodka suppressed a giggle. “She turned his woody into wood.”

“You are so lame.” Sassafras shook her head. The cat mewed loudly.

Critique Mentions

Now, as promised, I shall critique those entries that didn’t make it. Sometimes it can literally come down to the smallest things.

@lejamez

Simply the incorrect usage of lead. It was supposed to be ‘led’ as in ‘brought to’ not ‘lead’ as in ‘the core of an old fashioned pencil’.

@Leo_Godin

There was just one mistake which could have been to do with the narrator’s accent, but I felt it was just a typo and sadly with the quality of entries typos sometimes count. ‘brining’ instead of bringing.

So thank you to all of those who entered.  The criticism is never meant to harm. It is there to help you better your writing and someday win overall. I’m sure it will also benefit those who were not criticised. I hope this has helped you in your writing as well as encouraged you to join in again next week!

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