22nd #SatSunTails Winners

& so we have our #SatSunTails winner!

You can help by promoting next week’s #SatSunTails on your blogs, twitter, G+, facebook, tumblr etc, that would be great. Also, if you’re on twitter and you’d like an @reply every weekend in order to remind you that the competition is open then please leave a note regarding this along with your twitter handle in the comments of this post so I can set that up for you.

But for now, let’s get to the winners!

The Written Prompt

deepening intent

And yet again, a hard choice between such talented entries!

Runner Up Mentions

@klingorengi

A true banquet of description that led to a surprise feast..

@Leo_Godin

Sweet and far gentler than I expected. A lovely happy ending.

@Lurchmunster

An incredibly different approach to the prompts but a great result.

Overall Winner

@DavidALudwig

Strangely creepy but also hilarious. I hope everyone enjoys this piece as much as I did.

Winning Entry

She stood in shadow, hope shining in her eyes. Hope, in his presence! The audacity of it! Head Minion or not, she couldn’t just up and defy everything they were working for like that! Hope just wasn’t… Evil.

“I know you have a heart! Is allowing yourself to feel really so inconceivable?” She dared to speak, hands clasped as if in prayer.

He’d been too soft with her, because of her obedience and efficiency. Replacing her would be near impossible.

“I am not so easy to sway from my purpose,” he regretfully reached into his desk for his gun.

Her smile mirrored his regret, “I know.”

The shattering glass from the age dimmed rainbow roller crashing through the office window behind him was genuinely unexpected. Throwing himself aside with an exclamation he watched horrified as tattered colorful ursidaes emerged from the conveyance.

“So I called the Care Bears.”

Critique Mentions

Now, as promised, I shall critique those entries that didn’t make it. Sometimes it can literally come down to the smallest things.

@tollykit

A great piece, but there were just little bits of sentences that just could have been phrased better such as the ‘and jagged’. The ‘and’ here felt a little unnecessary. The same with ‘taken her away’. Something more intense might be better here such as ‘devoured her’. 

So thank you to all of those who entered.  The criticism is never meant to harm. It is there to help you better your writing and someday win overall. I’m sure it will also benefit those who were not criticised. I hope this has helped you as well as encouraged you to join in again next week!

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