Jubilee #SatSunTails Winners

& so we have our #SatSunTails winner!

You can help by promoting next week’s #SatSunTails on your blogs, twitter, G+, facebook, tumblr etc, that would be great. Also, if you’re on twitter and you’d like an @reply every weekend in order to remind you that the competition is open then please leave a note regarding this along with your twitter handle in the comments of this post so I can set that up for you.

But for now, let’s get to the winners!

The Written Prompt

archive of degraded monarchy

And yet again, a hard choice between such talented entries!

Runner Up Mentions

@leo_godin

An interesting idea that employed excellent descriptive techniques.

@klingorengi

I enjoyed the conversational tone of this tale and how it took a snapshot of something that could have been a bigger story.

@DavidALudwig

A curious story. I liked the way the protagonist destroyed our princess at the very end.

Overall Winner

@LurchMunster

Out of all the pieces this week, this one really caught my imagination.

Winning Entry

The monarch looked at the diagrams the swallowtails had made of the area. It was a large area, and had taken time to map. They’d done their job well. Now, he would do his job, and determine where the ants would excavate.

This was a huge finding. The largest in archaeological history. Everyone was familiar with the skeletons. Giant, bipedal beings, towering into the sky. They went extinct 65 million years ago. They had lived in large groups called cities, with a government called “Democracy”, which seemed to be some form of degraded monarchy where the king was replaced on a regular basis.

The monarch pointed an antenna at a rectangular outline on the map. “Here,” he informed the ants. “This appears to be an archive of some kind. Excavate here.” Thus began the insect excavation of the ruins of the place the bipedal beings had called New York.

Critique Mentions

Now, as promised, I shall critique those entries that didn’t make it. Sometimes it can literally come down to the smallest things.

Andrew

As you said yourself, this story didn’t quite work. I wonder if it was perhaps over complicated by the paragraph of dialogue in the centre that seemed to muddle things up. In a longer story with more time to get this information across it might have done better.  

@LupusAnthropos

This was a different idea but, although I enjoyed it, I felt the word prompt was not as smoothly inserted as it could have been.

@solimond

As much as I enjoyed this piece and wanted to put it in the runners up category, I couldn’t as the rules state you need to use both word and picture prompts and I could only find the word prompt included.

So thank you to all of those who entered.  The criticism is never meant to harm. It is there to help you better your writing and someday win overall. I’m sure it will also benefit those who were not criticised. I hope this has helped you as well as encouraged you to join in again next week!

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