13th #SatSunTails Winners!

& so we have our #SatSunTails winner!

You can help by promoting next week’s #SatSunTails on your blogs, twitter, G+, facebook, tumblr etc, that would be great. Also, if you’re on twitter and you’d like an @reply every weekend in order to remind you that the competition is open then please leave a note regarding this along with your twitter handle in the comments of this post so I can set that up for you.

But for now, let’s get to the winners!

The Written Prompt

burning up your/their/our/her/his concentration

And yet again, a hard choice between such talented entries!

Runner Up Mentions

@reravelling

This was brilliantly simple, in keeping with the age of the protagonists, and involved all five senses which really grasps the reader and involves them in the scene so much more than a piece with bland imagery that ignores sensory perceptions.

@DavidALudwig

The only way I can think to describe this piece is deep and different. A thought provoking read.

@MLConklin

It was a close call not to have this piece as the overall winner. It really was. But I adored it nonetheless and found it both beautifully tragic and uplifting in the shortest space. The words weren’t fancy or particularly over emphasised, but that wasn’t necessary in the slightest as their simplicity enhanced the beauty of this story’s emotion.

Overall Winner

Michael Hedley

As I previously stated, I genuinely agonised over whether this piece or Melanie’s piece (@MLConklin) should win and in the end I really had to choose this one because it involved me as a reader just as emotionally as Melanie’s did, but it still left me with questions as well as hopes for the narrator’s plight.

Winning Entry

This image was one that stirred feelings so deep and so powerful, it was almost as though some higher power had intended I thumb through the entire dust ridden album just to to find it. A feeling so incarnate that I had to question how it could ever be captured by anything so artificial as celluloid.

The smile on Jessica’s face never altered with age. I can only look at it for a heart beat before that very same heart is broken beyond repair. I wish with every fibre of my being that I could turn to the back page and see the two miscreants stood at the altar.

The boy in the photograph faces away from whichever intruder dared immortalise the summation of an entire childhood. For that, at least, I am eternally grateful. I could not conceive looking in to those eyes. An innocence lost.

Critique Mentions

Now, as promised, I shall critique those entries that didn’t make it. Sometimes it can literally come down to the smallest things.

Connor McDougall

A really lovely tale, but there were just a couple of overly enthusiastic comma placings where they didn’t need to be. At least one apostrophe was in the wrong place (its belong to it not it’s as in "it is") and there was no ‘t’ on the end of thought. I would recommend reading through slowly and aloud before submitting next time just to help.

@solimond

Same as Connor really, there were just a few places where there was an unnecessary comma breaking some sentences up into clauses that didn’t make sense as either a subordinate clause or a main clause.

@Leo_godin

Honestly loved the whole piece and especially the idea behind it. I simply thought that the last line could have done it a little more justice, that’s all. Sometimes it comes down to the smallest details like this in regards to judging.

So thank you to all of those who entered.  The criticism is never meant to harm. It is there to help you better your writing and someday win overall. I’m sure it will also benefit those who were not criticised. I hope this has helped you as well as encouraged you to join in again next week!

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